I really do dislike splitting infinitives, but since most others disagree, I suppose I should go along.A couple of suggestions: Change "vendors publicly to disclose" to "vendors to publicly disclose".
Enumerating which rights the vendors retain is problematic. I think it's better simply to drop the word "proprietary", which, come to think of it, is redundant.I would also change "all other proprietary rights to their" to "all copyrights and licensing rights to their". The reason is that "proprietary" can sometimes mean protected by secrecy, which is the one method of keeping something proprietary that they will not be able to use.
I'll think about that.I might also add something like, "The copyrights and licensing protections will be as strong as any fully published work, such as books, music, and movies, in which all of the copyrighted work is fully disclosed."
Indeed. But vendors are unlikely to look at it that way. I don't think they're concerned about anyone stealing their code or even their trade secrets, such as they are (how hard is it to solicit and count votes?) They're concerned about effective scrutiny. And, given their systems' performance so far, their concern is warranted.(Ironically, if all of the voting software were disclosed from all of the voting companies, the voting companies would be MORE protected than now, because each one would be able to tell if another had secretly stolen their software!)
Hope this helps, - Chris -----Original Message----- From: ovc-discuss-bounces+chris_ovc=sunnycampus.com@listman.sonic.net [mailto:ovc-discuss-bounces+chris_ovc=sunnycampus.com@listman.sonic.net] On Behalf Of Ron Crane Sent: Tuesday, February 21, 2006 7:08 PM To: Open Voting Consortium discussion list Subject: Re: [OVC-discuss] AB 2097 Fact Sheet, first cut Alan Dechert wrote:Bob Reid said "one page." Might need to make it two.Here is a more concise version (364 words v. 395) that should fit on a single page. It adds the text "or earlier" at the end of the first paragraph to correspond to the updated bill I posted earlier. Is anyone here going to discuss the bill? -R _______________________________________________ OVC-discuss mailing list OVC-discuss@listman.sonic.net http://lists.sonic.net/mailman/listinfo/ovc-discuss
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